The article on the front page of Fox News, “Health Care Revolt,” has a typo. Adding a missing comma would have made this article punctuationally perfect (yes, “punctuationally” is now a word).
The event drew the conservative “tea party” activists but unlike past rallies was officially sanctioned by House Republicans.
I would have written:
The event drew the conservative “tea party” activists, but unlike past rallies, it was officially sanctioned by House Republicans.
It’s the little things that make all the difference.
I appreciate The Huffington Post for its political focuses, but I often come across errors in their articles. On one hand I forgive them, and on the other hand I think they should be embarrassed for their shortcomings. In one of their headlining articles this morning, “Are Moderates No Longer Welcome In The Republican Party,” I found two instances in particular that I thought could use the expertise of a professional copywriter.
1) The GOP leadership insisted on Sunday political TV talk shows the party is strong and inclusive while Democrats described a Republican party out of touch with the people.
I found this sentence to be slightly awkward and would have reworded it like this:
On Sunday, the GOP leadership appeared on political TV talk shows and insisted the party was strong and inclusive. Democrats described the Republican party as being out of touch with the people.
2) A Republican loss in the 23rdwould leave the party with just two seats in the 29-member state congressional delegation.
A simple space between “23rd” and “would” would make this article that much better.
